Friday, February 7, 2020

#151 Backstory of the Poem "Comfort" By Michael A Griffith



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#151 Backstory of the Poem
“Comfort”
by Michael A Griffith

Can you go through the step-by-step process of writing this poem from the moment the idea was first conceived in your brain until final form? The tiniest of moments are often amazingly profound. In the case of “Comfort” it was the sight of my wife’s legs poking out from our jumbled-up comforter very early one morning. Sitting there in bed at dawn struck me as a lovely thing. The gentle light giving her skin a glow, her way of sleeping, the silence of our house...It all came together in a magical moment. And then our ever-hungry cats interrupted.
Once I’d fed them, I started to write, and the poem flowed out in a satisfying way. I can’t accurately say what you see as the final product now is a one-draft wonder, but it feels like that. The lines flowed and there has been no real wrestling over them. (Left:  Michael and his wife Sharon)
All told, writing “Comfort” took about an hour. Each change after the first draft took a few minutes each. Once I was confident my ideas were settled, I sent an early draft to a fellow poet for a read-through, and she loved it. But two sets of eyes are seldom enough to make one of my poems really work as best it can. I asked other poet friends to read it over, and they offered small but important ideas.
I then sent “Comfort” out into the world with good success. I’m happy many readers enjoy the romance in the poem and find it decidedly not sappy. It now rests nicely in the middle of my upcoming chapbook New Paths to Eden (Kelsay Books).  (Kelsay Web Logo Below) 

Where were you when you started to actually write the poem? And please describe the place in great detail. If you’d like to buy our house, it’s for sale.  Four-bedroom two-and-half bathroom suburban splendor.
The image that stoked my muse was our bedroom at dawn. Light was very muted, warm. The writing took place in my office downstairs, just off the kitchen. I jotted a very quick note before feeding our cats, then began writing on my computer.

What month and year did you start writing this poem? Oh, jeez...Let me check my files. January 10, 2019. Makes sense with the house being cold and me tasking down Christmas cards.

How many drafts of this poem did you write before going to the final? (And can you share a photograph of your rough drafts with pen markings on it?) Sorry, no. The single note I jotted (probably something like “Sharon’s legs”) has long since been recycled. Drafts were done on the computer. I see eight such files (Music, Music 2, Comfort, Comfort 2, etc.) The first title – and probably my chief weakness is giving my poems satisfying titles – was “Music,” but I recall that was just a working title. In re-reading the drafts, I see minor changes like choices of punctuation, change of a word, etc. But, as you know, even one minor change can make a huge difference to the end product. Those moments I open this interview with are like these so-called minor changes.    

Were there any lines in any of your rough drafts of this poem that were not in the final version? And can you share them with us? Here are changes I feel worth noting: In the first draft’s opening stanza I leave out the cats “in circles,” merely saying they are curled (the added hard “C” sound in “circles” gives more alliteration), I have a short line “Coffee’s not much help” in stanza 1, too, which didn’t stay in the drafts long. THAT additional hard “C: would make a reader feel like she was having caffeine jitters!  Stanzas two and three are the same in all drafts.
The only alteration to stanza four is line one: I had “our own” instead of “a” before “quiet sonata.” I recall one beta-reader feeling the “our own” seemed to beat them proverbial dead horse.
Stanza five and six were the ones with the most changes throughout drafts. I loved the insistent flow stanza five had in early drafts: warm in embrace, warm in symphony, and embrace,/a harmony too soon interrupted/by duties and tasks. But, as several beta-readers said, such insistence ruined the gentle voice of “Comfort.” I have to agree that this darling of mine had to be killed and the final version of stanza 5 is, indeed, more gentle. Insistence is never comforting.     

Stanza six also went through several transformations. Back when the title was “Music,” I feel I tried too hard to ie in musical ideas like symphony, sonata, harmony, etc., and disregarded the real appeal I was going for: comfort. So, change the title, change the attitude. This necessitated a change to the end stanza. Earlier drafts read “Our home will be filled with our music;/our home will soon be warm again./Tasjks done, we can feel light music overtake us. I don’t like that stanza very much now in comparison to the final draft’s, which I feel is much more satisfying.    

What do you want readers of this poem to take from this poem? What they’ve stated they are taking from it on social media: the feeling of gentle and romantic love.

Which part of the poem was the most emotional of you to write and why?  Well, I admit I felt quite alone as I looked over to those Christmas cards I mention in the start of stanza 2. My wife had left for work, and I was not teaching at that time, as my college was closed for winter break. I had time on my hands, which is not always a happy feeling. I did know, as I know as I write this, that I’ll feel happy as a well-loved puppy when I see my wife again tonight after her work.

Has this poem been published before? And if so where? Yes, most recently in the fine Ariel Chart. Editor/Publisher Mark Anthony Rossi (Above Right) does a perfect job matching poems and fiction with images.
http://arielchart.blogspot.com/


Anything you would like to add? I’m very pleased others can see their own lives in my poems, especially romantic ones like “Comfort.”

Comfort

Our house is cold and you are gone.
Cats curled into circles and even with the heat up,
the cold won’t recede.

Taking down the Christmas cards,
sweeping the floor, other lonely tasks
take me back to this morning’s first sight:

Your legs exposed from beneath the thick comforter.
In the morning light, the gold of your skin,
the slow movement of flesh, the curve of your calves,

all form a quiet sonata.
The performance becomes real only when
we are both awake and joined under the covers,

warm in embrace, warm in symphony —
this harmony, too soon interrupted
by tasks and duties.

Our house will soon be warm again,
filled with music all our own.
Tasks done, we become each other’s comforter.

Michael A Griffith lives in Hillsborough, NJ and teaches at Raritan Valley Community College. His poems, flash fiction, essays, and articles have appeared in many print and online publications and anthologies. His chapbooks Bloodline (The Blue Nib Imprint) and Exposed (Soma Publishing and Hidden Constellation Press) were released in November 2018. He was nominated for the Pushcart Prize for poetry in October 2018 and is a member of the U.S. 1 Poet’s Cooperative in Princeton, NJ. Mike is the USA & Canada Poetry Editor for The Blue Nib. His next chapbook, New Paths to Eden is forthcoming from Kelsay Books. (Above Left: Michael in March of 2019)
https://michaelgriffithwordpress.wordpress.com

BACKSTORY OF THE POEM LINKS

001  December 29, 2017
Margo Berdeshevksy’s “12-24”

002  January 08, 2018
Alexis Rhone Fancher’s “82 Miles From the Beach, We Order The Lobster At Clear Lake Café”

003 January 12, 2018
Barbara Crooker’s “Orange”

004 January 22, 2018
Sonia Saikaley’s “Modern Matsushima”

005 January 29, 2018
Ellen Foos’s “Side Yard”

006 February 03, 2018
Susan Sundwall’s “The Ringmaster”

007 February 09, 2018
Leslea Newman’s “That Night”

008 February 17, 2018
Alexis Rhone Fancher “June Fairchild Isn’t Dead”

009 February 24, 2018
Charles Clifford Brooks III “The Gift of the Year With Granny”

010 March 03, 2018
Scott Thomas Outlar’s “The Natural Reflection of Your Palms”

011 March 10, 2018
Anya Francesca Jenkins’s “After Diane Beatty’s Photograph “History Abandoned”

012  March 17, 2018
Angela Narciso Torres’s “What I Learned This Week”

013 March 24, 2018
Jan Steckel’s “Holiday On ICE”

014 March 31, 2018
Ibrahim Honjo’s “Colors”

015 April 14, 2018
Marilyn Kallett’s “Ode to Disappointment”

016  April 27, 2018
Beth Copeland’s “Reliquary”

017  May 12, 2018
Marlon L Fick’s “The Swallows of Barcelona”

018  May 25, 2018
Juliet Cook’s “ARTERIAL DISCOMBOBULATION”

019  June 09, 2018
Alexis Rhone Fancher’s “Stiletto Killer. . . A Surmise”

020 June 16, 2018
Charles Rammelkamp’s “At Last I Can Start Suffering”

021  July 05, 2018
Marla Shaw O’Neill’s “Wind Chimes”

022 July 13, 2018
Julia Gordon-Bramer’s “Studying Ariel”

023 July 20, 2018
Bill Yarrow’s “Jesus Zombie”

024  July 27, 2018
Telaina Eriksen’s “Brag 2016”

025  August 01, 2018
Seth Berg’s “It is only Yourself that Bends – so Wake up!”

026  August 07, 2018
David Herrle’s “Devil In the Details”

027  August 13, 2018
Gloria Mindock’s “Carmen Polo, Lady Necklaces, 2017”

028  August 21, 2018
Connie Post’s “Two Deaths”

029  August 30, 2018
Mary Harwell Sayler’s “Faces in a Crowd”

030 September 16, 2018
Larry Jaffe’s “The Risking Point”

031  September 24, 2018
Mark Lee Webb’s “After We Drove”

032  October 04, 2018
Melissa Studdard’s “Astral”

033 October 13, 2018
Robert Craven’s “I Have A Bass Guitar Called Vanessa”

034  October 17, 2018
David Sullivan’s “Paper Mache Peaches of Heaven”

035 October 23, 2018
Timothy Gager’s “Sobriety”

036  October 30, 2018
Gary Glauber’s “The Second Breakfast”

037  November 04, 2018
Heather Forbes-McKeon’s “Melania’s Deaf Tone Jacket”

038 November 11, 2018
Andrena Zawinski’s “Women of the Fields”

039  November 00, 2018
Gordon Hilger’s “Poe”

040 November 16, 2018
Rita Quillen’s “My Children Question Me About Poetry” and “Deathbed Dreams”

041 November 20, 2018
Jonathan Kevin Rice’s “Dog Sitting”

042 November 22, 2018
Haroldo Barbosa Filho’s “Mountain”

043  November 27, 2018
Megan Merchant’s “Grief Flowers”

044 November 30, 2018
Jonathan P Taylor’s “This poem is too neat”

045  December 03, 2018
Ian Haight’s “Sungmyo for our Dead Father-in-Law”

046 December 06, 2018
Nancy Dafoe’s “Poem in the Throat”

047 December 11, 2018
Jeffrey Pearson’s “Memorial Day”

048  December 14, 2018
Frank Paino’s “Laika”

049  December 15, 2018
Jennifer Martelli’s “Anniversary”

O50  December 19, 2018
Joseph Ross’s For Gilberto Ramos, 15, Who Died in the Texas Desert, June 2014”

051 December 23, 2018
“The Persistence of Music”
by Anatoly Molotkov

052  December 27, 2018
“Under Surveillance”
by Michael Farry

053  December 28, 2018
“Grand Finale”
by Renuka Raghavan

054  December 29, 2018
“Aftermath”
by Gene Barry

055 January 2, 2019
“&”
by Larissa Shmailo

056  January 7, 2019
“The Seamstress:
by Len Kuntz

057  January 10, 2019
"Natural History"
by Camille T Dungy


058  January 11, 2019
“BLOCKADE”
by Brian Burmeister

059  January 12, 2019
“Lost”
by Clint Margrave

060 January 14, 2019
“Menopause”
by Pat Durmon

061 January 19, 2019
“Neptune’s Choir”
by Linda Imbler

062  January 22, 2019
“Views From the Driveway”
by Amy Barone

063  January 25, 2019
“The heron leaves her haunts in the marsh”
by Gail Wronsky

064  January 30, 2019
“Shiprock”
by Terry Lucas

065 February 02, 2019
“Summer 1970, The University of Virginia Opens to Women in the Fall”
by Alarie Tennille

066 February 05, 2019
“At School They Learn Nouns”
by Patrick Bizzaro

067  February 06, 2019
“I Must Not Breathe”
by Angela Jackson-Brown

068 February 11, 2019
“Lunch on City Island, Early June”
by Christine Potter

069 February 12, 2019
“Singing”
by Andrew McFadyen-Ketchum

070 February 14, 2019
“Daily Commute”
by Christopher P. Locke

071 February 18, 2019
“How Silent The Trees”
by Wyn Cooper


072 February 20, 2019
“A New Psalm of Montreal”
by Sheenagh Pugh

073 February 23, 2019
“Make Me A Butterfly”
by Amy Barbera

074 February 26, 2019
“Anthem”
by Sandy Coomer

075 March 4, 2019
“Shape of a Violin”
by Kelly Powell

076 March 5, 2019
“Inward Oracle”
by J.P. Dancing Bear

077 March 7, 2019
“I Broke My Bust Of Jesus”
by Susan Sundwall

078 March 9, 2019
“My Mother at 19”
by John Guzlowski

079 March 10, 2019
“Paddling”
by Chera Hammons Miller

080 March 12, 2019
“Of Water and Echo”
by Gillian Cummings

081   082   083    March 14, 2019
“Little Political Sense”   “Crossing Kansas with Jim
Morrison”  “The Land of Sky and Blue Waters”
by Dr. Lindsey Martin-Bowen

084 March 15, 2019
“A Tune To Remember”
by Anna Evans

085 March 19, 2019
“At the End of Time (Wish You Were Here)
by Jeannine Hall Gailey

086 March 20, 2019
“Garden of Gethsemane”
by Marletta Hemphill

087 March 21, 2019
“Letters From a War”
by Chelsea Dingman

088 March 26, 2019
“HAT”
by Bob Heman

089 March 27, 2019
“Clay for the Potter”
by Belinda Bourgeois

#090 March 30, 2019
“The Pose”
by John Hicks

#091 April 2, 2019
“Last Night at the Wursthaus”
by Doug Holder

#092 April 4, 2019
“Original Sin”
by Diane Lockward

#093 April 5, 2019
“A Father Calls to his child on liveleak”
by Stephen Byrne

#094 April 8, 2019
“XX”
by Marc Zegans

#095 April 12, 2019
“Landscape and Still Life”
by Marjorie Maddox

#096 April 16, 2019
“Strawberries Have Been Growing Here for Hundreds of
Years”
by Mary Ellen Lough

#097 April 17, 2019
“The New Science of Slippery Surfaces”
by Donna Spruijt-Metz

#098 April 19, 2019
“Tennessee Epithalamium”
by Alyse Knorr

#099 April 20, 2019
“Mermaid, 1969”
by Tameca L. Coleman

#100 April 21, 2019
“How Do You Know?”
by Stephanie

#101 April 23, 2019
“Rare Book and Reader”
by Ned Balbo

#102 April 26, 2019
“THUNDER”
by Jefferson Carter

#103 May 01, 2019
“The sight of a million angels”
by Jenneth Graser

#104 May 09, 2019
“How to tell my dog I’m dying”
by Richard Fox

#105 May 17, 2019
“Promises Had Been Made”
by Sarah Sarai

#106 June 01, 2019
“i sold your car today”
by Pamela Twining

#107 June 02, 2019
“Abandoned Stable”
by Nancy Susanna Breen

#108 June 05, 2019
“Cupcake”
by Julene Tripp Weaver

#109 June 6, 2019
“Bobby’s Story”
by Jimmy Pappas

#110 June 10, 2019
“When You Ask Me to Tell You About My Father”
by Pauletta Hansel

#111 Backstory of the Poem’s
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#112 Backstory of the Poem’s
“Relics”
by Kate Peper

#113 Backstory of the Poem’s
“Q”
by Jennifer Johnson

#114 Backstory of the Poem’s
“Brushing My Hair”
by Tammika Dorsey Jones

#115 Backstory of the Poem
“Because the Birds Will Survive, Too”
by Katherine Riegel

#116 Backstory of the Poem
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by Joan Barasovska

#117 Backstory of the Poem
“NEW YEAR”S EVE 2016”
by Michael Meyerhofer

#118 Backstory of the Poem
“Dear the estranged,”
by Gina Tron

#119 Backstory of the Poem
“In Remembrance of Them”
by Janet Renee Cryer

#120 Backstory of the Poem
“Horse Fly Grade Card, Doesn’t Play Well With Others”
by David L. Harrison

#121 Backstory of the Poem
“My Mother’s Cookbook”
by Rachael Ikins

#122 Backstory of the Poem
“Cousins I Never Met”
by Maureen Kadish Sherbondy

#123 Backstory of the Poem
“To Those Who Were Our First Gods”
by Nickole Brown

#124 Backstory of the Poem
“Looking For Sunsets (In the Early Morning)”
by Paul Levinson

#125 Backstory of the Poem
“Tracy”
by Tiff Holland

#126 Backstory of the Poem
“Legs”
by Cindy Hochman

#127 Backstory of the Poem
“Anathema”
by Natasha Saje

#128 Backstory of the Poem
“How to Explain Fertility When an Acquaintance Asks Casually”
by Allison Blevins

#129 Backstory of the Poem
“The Art of Meditation In Tennessee”
by Linda Parsons

#130 Backstory of the Poem
“Schooling High, In Beslan”
by Satabdi Saha

#131 Backstory of the Poem
“Baby Jacob survives the Oso Landslide, 2014”
by Amie Zimmerman

#132 Backstory of the Poem
“Our Age of Anxiety”
by Henry Israeli

#133 Backstory of the Poem
“Earth Cries; Heaven Smiles”
by Ken Allan Dronsfield

#134  Backstory of the Poem
“Eons”
by Janine Canan

#135 Backstory of the Poem
“Sworn”
by Catherine Zickgraf

#136 Backstory of the Poem
“Bushwick Blue”
by Susana H. Case

#137 Backstory of the Poem
“Then She Was Forever”
by Paula Persoleo

#138 Backstory of the Poem
“Enough”
by Kris Bigalk

#139 Backstory of the Poem
“From Ghosts of the Upper Floor”
by Tony Trigilio

#140 Backstory of the Poem
“Cloud Audience”
by Wanita Zumbrunnen

#141 Backstory of the Poem
“Condition Center”
by Matthew Freeman

#142 Backstory of the Poem
“Adventuresome Woman”
by Cheryl Suchors

#143 Backstory of the Poem
“The Way Back”
by Robert Walicki

#144 Backstory of the Poem
“If I Had Three Lives”
by Sarah Russell

#145 Backstory of the Poem
“Reservoir”
by Andrea Rexilius

#146 Backstory of the Poem
“The Night Before Our Dog Died”
by Melissa Fite Johnson

#147 Backstory of the Poem
“Pileated”
by David Anthony Sam

#148 Backstory of the Poem
“A Kitchen Argument”
by Matthew Gwathmey

#149 Backstory of the Poem
“Insulation”
by Bruce Kauffman

#150 Backstory of the Poem
“I Will Tell You Where I’ve Been”
by Justin Hamm

#151 Backstory of the Poem
“Comfort”
by Michael A Griffith