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in a never-ending series called BACKSTORY OF THE POEM where the Chris
Rice Cooper Blog (CRC) focuses on one specific poem and how the poet wrote
that specific poem. All BACKSTORY OF THE POEM links are at the end
of this piece.
#36 Backstory of the Poem “The Second Breakfast”
by Gary Glauber
Can you go through the step-by-step process of writing this
poem from the moment the idea was first conceived in your brain until final
form? I have several methods of kick starting my poetic
inspiration, and sometimes that means going through an exercise or a
prompt.
For instance, there is a fine journal
entitled The First Line (https://www.thefirstline.com/) that provides an opening line, and all the stories in that issue will branch off from that shared opener. (Right: The First Line logo) Other publications (like 3 Elements Review or Eclectica’s Word Challenge) (http://3elementsreview.com/submit) provide a list of unrelated words that must be used in the work.
For this particular
poem, I read a call for submissions from a small literary journal based in
Edinburgh, Scotland entitled Far Off
Places (http://faroffplaces.org/). They
provided the title months ahead of the deadline and in turn writers were asked
to create pieces from that. Their Volume III, Issue 1, was going to be called
“The Second Breakfast.” The first draft of my poem with that title was written in
early June, 2014.
Long story short, it cannot be done. It is just a matter of time before worlds collide and things fall apart. In my youthful ignorance, perhaps I thought otherwise – or more likely, I did not think it through at all. At any rate, I performed original music at coffeehouses back then, and after one performance, a woman came up to me and asked if I had any plans for breakfast the next day. I admired the clever way she caught my interest, and that soon became a memorable breakfast story. So now I had my rough source material – my task was to access the emotional confusion of that time, pondering whether or not to pursue that relationship further (hence, the second breakfast).
On June 7th,
2014, I sent it via email to the journal.
About a week later, I received an acknowledgment of my submission, and a
promise that final decisions would be made by August of that year. (Right: Gary Glauber in June of 2014. Copyright permission granted by Gary Glauber for this CRC Blog Post Only)
That promise was optimistic. On November 8th, I actually heard back from Annie Rutherford in an email that said the following: Dear Gary, Many thanks again for your submission to Far Off Places (https://www.
facebook.com/
FarOffPlaces/) and apologies for the horribly slow response - the last few months were considerably more hectic than we could have anticipated.
We had
quite a ponder over your poem, but I'm sorry to say that, on consideration, we
didn't feel it was right for the magazine. I enjoyed the tone and the
relationship depicted was fresh and unusual - but something just didn't click. I wonder whether the piece might almost work better as a (longer) prose piece?
It feels like either the poem should be stripped down to its bare bones - at
the moment it tells us, rather than shows us what happens - or it should be
developed into a longer portrait of the relationship. Sorry for
the disheartening news. Please do submit to us in future though - we'd be keen
to read more of your work.
It was disheartening, but it forced me to reassess the poem. I removed parts of lines that seemed trite or clichéd, and grouped the stanzas differently until I got to where it seemed stronger. I now had to find a new home for it, but I was keeping the title. (For those interested, take a look at my notes on an earlier version of the poem.)
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%3A1153156572%3A1540925608) and John Hancock (https://www.face
book.com/jghmemphis?lst=100004428366683%3A1425125146
%3A1540925731) of The Legendary, who published it in their March, 2015 Issue 48 online (http://www.down
dirtyword.com/authors/garyglauber.html)
It also was included
in my chapbook Memory Marries Desire
(from Finishing Line Press) in 2016, with my preferred spacing intact.
(Interesting side note: Far Off Places
published “The Second Breakfast” issue in February 2015 – and it did not
include this).
Anything you would like
to add? I think people avoid love poems in general these
days, but there are notes of the universal to be found in the complexity of
relationships – the emotions, the turmoil, the challenges. I would encourage the exploration of those
aspects, because they are genuine and offer points of association and
identification.
Contact
information? It would be lovely if people felt curious enough to
seek out my work at either Amazon or Barnes & Noble, or through the sites
of the indie publishers. Here is the link to my Amazon page: https://www.amazon.com/default/e/B012BMLL3E?redirectedFromKindleDbs=true
The Second Breakfast
The
second breakfast was not lavish.
It
was conciliatory; eaten alone,
clouded
with heavy thoughts,
strong
espresso, and long reflection.
He
pondered the impossibility
of
making it work.
She
was kind, sweet,
attentive,
interested.
She
approached, a smiling stranger,
asking,
“Have any plans for breakfast?”
The
maneuver’s playful candor
subtly
insinuated her into his life.
He
admired the forwardness,
let
himself be charmed into the invite.
The
night proved pleasant enough;
morning
delivered the promise
of
superb banana-chocolate chip pancakes,
then
she left.
Now,
he was eating again, but less.
The
second breakfast was a time for decisions.
She
was older, a former French major,
a
little exotic, a nurse with varied shifts.
Beyond
that, she hadn’t told him much:
she
lived in town, enjoyed the pancakes.
Hesitant,
he wasn’t sold
on
another steady relationship
so
close on the heels
of
last year’s crash and burn.
Over
a bite of toast, he searched
for
graceful ways out, pouring another cup,
debating
compassion, morals, obligations,
sip
by painful sip.
Gary Glauber is a
poet, fiction writer, teacher, and former music journalist. His works have received multiple Pushcart
Prize and Best of the Net nominations. He champions the underdog to the melodic
rhythms of obscure power pop. His two collections, Small Consolations (Aldrich Press) and Worth the Candle (Five Oaks Press) and a chapbook Memory Marries Desire (Finishing Line
Press) are available through Amazon, Barnes & Noble, and the
publishers.
BACKSTORY OF THE POEM
LINKS
001 December 29, 2017
Margo Berdeshevksy’s “12-24”
Margo Berdeshevksy’s “12-24”
002 January 08, 2018
Alexis Rhone Fancher’s “82 Miles From the Beach, We Order The Lobster At Clear Lake Café”
Alexis Rhone Fancher’s “82 Miles From the Beach, We Order The Lobster At Clear Lake Café”
003 January 12, 2018
Barbara
Crooker’s “Orange”
004 January 22, 2018
Sonia
Saikaley’s “Modern Matsushima”
005 January 29, 2018
Ellen
Foos’s “Side Yard”
006 February 03, 2018
Susan
Sundwall’s “The Ringmaster”
007 February 09, 2018
Leslea
Newman’s “That Night”
008 February 17, 2018
Alexis
Rhone Fancher “June Fairchild Isn’t Dead”
009 February 24, 2018
Charles
Clifford Brooks III “The Gift of the Year With Granny”
010 March 03, 2018
Scott
Thomas Outlar’s “The Natural Reflection of Your Palms”
011 March 10, 2018
Anya
Francesca Jenkins’s “After Diane Beatty’s Photograph “History Abandoned”
012 March 17, 2018
Angela
Narciso Torres’s “What I Learned This Week”
013 March 24, 2018
Jan
Steckel’s “Holiday On ICE”
014 March 31, 2018
Ibrahim
Honjo’s “Colors”
015 April 14, 2018
Marilyn
Kallett’s “Ode to Disappointment”
016 April 27, 2018
Beth
Copeland’s “Reliquary”
017 May 12, 2018
Marlon
L Fick’s “The Swallows of Barcelona”
018 May 25, 2018
Juliet
Cook’s “ARTERIAL DISCOMBOBULATION”
019 June 09, 2018
Alexis
Rhone Fancher’s “Stiletto Killer. . . A Surmise”
020 June 16, 2018
Charles
Rammelkamp’s “At Last I Can Start Suffering”
021 July 05, 2018
Marla
Shaw O’Neill’s “Wind Chimes”
022 July 13, 2018
Julia Gordon-Bramer’s
“Studying Ariel”
023 July 20, 2018
Bill Yarrow’s “Jesus
Zombie”
024 July 27, 2018
Telaina Eriksen’s “Brag
2016”
025 August 01, 2018
Seth Berg’s “It is only
Yourself that Bends – so Wake up!”
026 August 07, 2018
David Herrle’s “Devil In
the Details”
027 August 13, 2018
Gloria Mindock’s “Carmen
Polo, Lady Necklaces, 2017”
028 August 21, 2018
Connie Post’s “Two
Deaths”
029 August 30, 2018
Mary Harwell Sayler’s
“Faces in a Crowd”
030 September 16, 2018
Larry Jaffe’s “The
Risking Point”
031 September 24,
2018
Mark Lee Webb’s “After
We Drove”
032 October 04, 2018
Melissa Studdard’s
“Astral”
033 October 13, 2018
Robert Craven’s “I Have
A Bass Guitar Called Vanessa”
034 October 17, 2018
David Sullivan’s “Paper
Mache Peaches of Heaven”
035 October 23, 2018
Timothy Gager’s
“Sobriety”
036 October 30, 2018
Gary Glauber’s “The
Second Breakfast”
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